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  • butterfly1964
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    #261
    Originally posted by RockyMarcianofan00
    Take it to the thunderdome
    Tell me honestly, are the matchups poorly written in your poinion, I mean vocabulary wise?

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    • RockyMarcianofan00
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      #262
      Reviewing threads looking for gramatical errors.....
      I'd like to think I write essays very well but when i post on forums i tend to let my i's stay lower case

      I need to review because I only read a few of the rounds and then winner because I have a short attention span for reading stuff on a computer screen. A book i can read but this cancerous screen gives me a headache.
      Last edited by RockyMarcianofan00; 06-03-2006, 10:20 PM.

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      • RockyMarcianofan00
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        #263
        Originally posted by butterfly1964
        Tell me honestly, are the matchups poorly written in your poinion, I mean vocabulary wise?
        To be honest it depends what your going for

        When you write sounds more like an announcer announcing the fight which is what i think you were going for. It Doesn't sound like a formal essay with the long sentences and descriptive words which is what Smokin' is lookin for.

        It sounds more like an announcer saying it into the mic which is what your saying. With short sentences and sometimes not proper sentences.

        Some sentences are Essay like but i think your trying to stay more true to the Announcer persona (spelling?)

        Example:
        Rather then saying
        George Foreman is down in the 8th round of this fight. He's bleeding from the mouth as Muhammad Ali raises his arms in proud victory for his win.

        your saying
        and Foremans down in the 8th round. he doesn't get up and Ali is dancing in hysteria for winning against Foreman.

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        • Smokin'
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          #264
          Be honest butterfly, have you actually seen footage of Johnson/Dempsey?

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          • RockyMarcianofan00
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            #265
            Originally posted by Smokin'
            Be honest butterfly, have you actually seen footage of Johnson/Dempsey?
            I've seen footage on both of those fighters, there's little footage of Dempsey

            There's even less of Johnson.
            I saw part of one Johnson fight and I think they only have like 2 of his fights anyway

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            • butterfly1964
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              #266
              Originally posted by RockyMarcianofan00
              To be honest it depends what your going for

              When you write sounds more like an announcer announcing the fight which is what i think you were going for. It Doesn't sound like a formal essay with the long sentences and descriptive words which is what Smokin' is lookin for.

              It sounds more like an announcer saying it into the mic which is what your saying. With short sentences and sometimes not proper sentences.

              Some sentences are Essay like but i think your trying to stay more true to the Announcer persona (spelling?)

              Example:
              Rather then saying
              George Foreman is down in the 8th round of this fight. He's bleeding from the mouth as Muhammad Ali raises his arms in proud victory for his win.

              your saying
              and Foremans down in the 8th round. he doesn't get up and Ali is dancing in hysteria for winning against Foreman.
              Yeah, well the announcer persona is what I was trying to portray. The only thing wrong with it is that I oftentimes use lower case when I shouln't, because sometimes I don't feel like pressing the shift key , and I type so fast that I make a few spelling errors, but that's about it. The vocabulary I use I believe is pretty high level at times, and I give a detailed description of the prefight, the fight, in between rounds, and the post fight. I think overall I did a good job.

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              • RockyMarcianofan00
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                #267
                Originally posted by butterfly1964
                Yeah, well the announcer persona is what I was trying to portray. The only thing wrong with it is that I oftentimes use lower case when I shouln't, because sometimes I don't feel like pressing the shift key , and I type so fast that I make a few spelling errors, but that's about it. The vocabulary I use I believe is pretty high level at times, and I give a detailed description of the prefight, the fight, in between rounds, and the post fight. I think overall I did a good job.
                I do the same thing, if i wanted to i could type every post as if it where an essay but i mean its a forum i'd rather type fast and as if i were talking to somebody rather then type it like an essay. All my teachers and professors say i write beatifully but whatever

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                • butterfly1964
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                  #268
                  Originally posted by Smokin'
                  Be honest butterfly, have you actually seen footage of Johnson/Dempsey?
                  "Have you actually seen footage of Johnson/Dempsey?"

                  OF COURSE I'VE SEEN THEIR FIGHTS, ******! WHY THE HELL WOULD I WRITE ABOUT THEM AND NOT HAVE AN INCLING OF HOW THEY FIGHT OR NOT KNOW ANYTHING ABOUT THEM?!

                  They are my two favorite fighters anyway(besides ali of course), and i have five fights of johnson and six fights of dempsey in my collection and i have seen a total of 13 fights between the two. Does that answer your question buddy?

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                  • Yogi
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                    #269
                    Originally posted by RockyMarcianofan00
                    I've seen footage on both of those fighters, there's little footage of Dempsey

                    There's even less of Johnson.
                    I saw part of one Johnson fight and I think they only have like 2 of his fights anyway
                    There's a fair amount of footage of both Dempsey & Johnson, Rock. A lot of their fights are no longer available, but of each of them these are the fights that are still avaiable on film today;

                    Johnson versus Burns, Flynn, Moran, Willard, Jeffries, Ketchel...umm, those are the ones I can bring to memory off hand, and I've seen footage of them all except the Moran fight.

                    Dempsey versus Willard, Carpentier, Brennan, Firpo, Tunney (x2), Sharkey, Gibbons...I've seen footage from all of those.

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                    • butterfly1964
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                      #270
                      Originally posted by RockyMarcianofan00
                      I do the same thing, if i wanted to i could type every post as if it where an essay but i mean its a forum i'd rather type fast and as if i were talking to somebody rather then type it like an essay. All my teachers and professors say i write beatifully but whatever
                      Yeah, I mean this joker is the only person to say that I write like trash, so obviously he's just trying to get under my skin.

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