it's ok but the first guys voice is way too thin.
A rappers voice must be deeper (some guys just don't have a rap voice i guess)
I liked when rappers would take old historical figures & mixed a song with their life & name.
example (scareface) song: Jesse James (the most violent & vicious outlaw in the old wild wild west)
http://i.dailymail.co.uk/i/pix/tm/2007/11/jessejamesMOS0411_428x269_to_468x312.jpg