Pacquiao Looking Good as Training Camp Begins

[Biggspeed]

i guess i am not the only one that notices this garbage

Nope, you are definitely not the only one. Funny thing is... I am Filipino who is a PAC nuthugger & even I can't stand Ronnie's so called articles.

[alembic]

Objectivity

To the writer,

The first two paragraphs...

[quote]
Celebrated trainer Freddie Roach who celebrated his birthday Friday (Manila Time) was elated at just how good Filipino boxing hero and national treasure Manny Pacquiao looked on his second day of training at the Wild Card Gym in Los Angeles.

Speaking from the gym to BoxingScene.com, insidesports.ph, Standard Today and Viva Sports, Roach said he was “just great” and looked extremely good while doing eight rounds on the punch-mitts.
[end quote]

... might better serve your readership if written as:

[alternate version]
Trainer Freddie Roach who celebrated his birthday Friday (Manila Time) was pleased with Manny Pacquiao's second day at the Wild Card Gym in Los Angeles.

Speaking from his gym, he told BoxingScene.com, insidesports.ph, Standard Today and Viva Sports that Pacquiao looked solid during an eight round session on the punch-mitts. Roach said his fighter was "just great."
[end alternate version]

I realize you have to deal with deadlines but your primary responsibility as a journalist is to present the facts clearly and transparently.

In the second paragraph, it could be misconstrued that Roach felt "just great" about hitting the punch-mitts for eight rounds himself (although I know you meant that Roach was talking about Manny).

Also, your bias is too blatant. I feel it hurts your credibility.

Clear, economical writing is king! Please check out Elements of Style (Strunk), especially Part III:

http://www.bartleby.com/141/

I read this little classic at least once a year to get my writing back in line.

Keep up the good work!

Cheers,
Jo

[S A M U R A I]

Clear, economical writing is king! Please check out Elements of Style (Strunk), especially Part III:

http://www.bartleby.com/141/

I read this little classic at least once a year to get my writing back in line.

Very good. Unfortunately, I think your suggestion will fall on deaf ears, for even the Introduction is probably enough to send most people to sleep.



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[alembic]

My suggestion was directed to the writer of the article. I realize most forum members have no interest in such a book. But a journalist will most definitely want to improve his or her writing skills.

[S A M U R A I]

My suggestion was directed to the writer of the article. I realize most forum members have no interest in such a book. But a journalist will most definitely want to improve his or her writing skills.

You may also want to consider improving your own. There should be no period before "But a journalist...", it should be one sentence that makes use of a comma to separate the parts.

Just messing.

I agree with you. The author of this particular article would do well to improve his writing skills.



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[poontango]

this guys a f a g. spare us the histrionics...f a g

and p.s youre a horrible writer

[theggamme209]

Who CARES!! Ronnie U little *****!!

[Dave Rado]

[alternate version]
Trainer Freddie Roach who celebrated his birthday Friday (Manila Time)

Why would any boxing fan give a monkey's about when Roach celebrated his birthday?

[S A M U R A I]

Maybe they'd want to send him a cake?



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[VERDUGO]

i'm with ya bro,f ronnie!

I'm with both of you.
Ronnie can go **** a horny camel!