[PLEASE HELP] Rap fans, this is my freestyle

[Suckmedry]

I came up with this on the spot, and wrote it down. Do you think it is any good?

Talk **** get hit, you won’t believe how ill leave ya
Split ya head open with a meat cleaver
Make ya wish ya parents never conceived ya
You act all hard
But you about as hard as Justin bieber
Unbelievea-Bul the bull**** you talk
The reason you talk, is cause you cant walk the walk
Gouge ya eyes out with a ****in fork
And the alligator I send, the teeth wont be corked
Fill ya with lead, leave ya dead
Blood on the bedspread
Don’t’ give a ****, about the ***** ass feds
Talk to police, got no place on the streets
Leave ya dead, bleedin at my seat
Mother****ers talk ****, bout how they gonna unseat me
Defeat me
Unlikely, crikey!, I grab ya like steve Irwin grab the crocodile
Tie ya to the car, drag you for a quarter mile
Cut ya up let you bleed for a while
ill is my style
sick is my flow
see the police come
we be like “ready set go”
*****es talk **** I be like “suck my dick hoe”
see the boys I be like “Yo”
im the wickedest
you wish you could be as sick as this
I make ****s laugh like, chris rock
But that don’t mean, I wont bust the glock
talk about chickens
man i got a flock

[Coast]

no really um if this isn't a joke....3/10 to be honest.

too simple
soft punch lines
basic lyrics


dont mean to offend you but that's just how I see it

[Bretty Poy32]

you wrote better lyrics than 2pac

[DeelDough]

Son , I think you have talent. Would you like to sign with BS records.

[Suckmedry]

Son , I think you have talent. Would you like to sign with BS records.

Bs records? sounds legit, im in

[Suckmedry]

no really um if this isn't a joke....3/10 to be honest.

too simple
soft punch lines
basic lyrics


dont mean to offend you but that's just how I see it

do better..........

..........seriously. I'm not offended, its the net ffs, but if you think its simple and all that, give me an example of something better

[Coast]

do better..........

..........seriously. I'm not offended, its the net ffs, but if you think its simple and all that, give me an example of something better

ha I no rapper but here is an example of a 10/10 flow
Courtesy of K-Rino

K-Rino off of his Fear No Evil album

My raps will shatter anatomical compositions to shrapnel
Twist you up horizontally, vertically, and diagonal
I'm the scary one, paragraph killer copied by everyone
Rappers mangled so bad it turned vultures to vegetarians
I'm laced with flows so sharp each word places
Five slashes like a blade that made faces look like K-Swiss
I flame throw, you maintain the same flow
In cloud battles I make colored blood stains drip out of the rainbow
My life get to the point where it don't matter what you spice with
I'm immune to stab wounds he kept jugging me till the knife quit
I was foreseen by an Ethiopian queen
Not in the past but in the future 3017
I'm a live threat that survived seven hundred twenty five threats
You witnessing a prelude the real me hasn't arrived yet (ugh uh)
My rough courses are taught by unseen forces
In a cold cave with a witch, two leprechauns, and a sorceress
I transcend, concentrate ya levels no man been standing
With a cello on my chin playing mentally with my hands in
When he slept all you heard was mad screams
Cuz he was dreaming that he kept waking up from bad dreams
And each dream contained a hundred more dreams with different scenes
Prolonging paralysis with multiplied recurring themes
And I do it smooth
My epilogues making the music move
Twist your brain up with my hand and mash it back up like a Rubix Cube
Historical my eloquence is categorical
Travel thru portals the immortal metaphorical oracle
Made provisions to purchase ammunition and construct criticism
And slaughter kitchens where I mass produce apparitions

[dj Ramos]

[Suckmedry]

ha I no rapper but here is an example of a 10/10 flow
Courtesy of K-Rino

K-Rino off of his Fear No Evil album

My raps will shatter anatomical compositions to shrapnel
Twist you up horizontally, vertically, and diagonal
I'm the scary one, paragraph killer copied by everyone
Rappers mangled so bad it turned vultures to vegetarians
I'm laced with flows so sharp each word places
Five slashes like a blade that made faces look like K-Swiss
I flame throw, you maintain the same flow
In cloud battles I make colored blood stains drip out of the rainbow
My life get to the point where it don't matter what you spice with
I'm immune to stab wounds he kept jugging me till the knife quit
I was foreseen by an Ethiopian queen
Not in the past but in the future 3017
I'm a live threat that survived seven hundred twenty five threats
You witnessing a prelude the real me hasn't arrived yet (ugh uh)
My rough courses are taught by unseen forces
In a cold cave with a witch, two leprechauns, and a sorceress
I transcend, concentrate ya levels no man been standing
With a cello on my chin playing mentally with my hands in
When he slept all you heard was mad screams
Cuz he was dreaming that he kept waking up from bad dreams
And each dream contained a hundred more dreams with different scenes
Prolonging paralysis with multiplied recurring themes
And I do it smooth
My epilogues making the music move
Twist your brain up with my hand and mash it back up like a Rubix Cube
Historical my eloquence is categorical
Travel thru portals the immortal metaphorical oracle
Made provisions to purchase ammunition and construct criticism
And slaughter kitchens where I mass produce apparitions

fair enough, that is sick.

but he is a professional, i was just messing around a wrote some **** down

[Suckmedry]