View Full Version : Analyzing Eminem's and Jay-Z's first verse on Renegade


the traveler
07-15-2008, 02:44 PM
"And Eminem killed you on your own ****," Nas said to Jay-Z on his diss song "Ether". But, did he really?

When asked by The Source magazine in an interview circa 2001 about what Nas said, Eminem himself said that he is surprised when people tell him that he killed Jay-Z on the hit song "Renegade" and that he believes that he and Jays verses were infact equal.

I'm with Eminem in that I don't understand why so many people feel so strongly that Eminem had the better verse than Jay-Z.


Renegade: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RejfpFCLti0

Ok, here's the thing. Both verses are similar in that they're directed towards critics. Eminem's verse is directed towards those people that were all up in arms about his lyrics and that wanted to censor his ****. Mostly it's parents and the media.

He opens up his verse stating that he may or not be the menace that he's claimed to be, then the next 6 lines are pretty empty. He spends the next 5 basically stating who he is by saying questions. These lines are pretty empty and don't have much to do with the main point of the verse.

He doesn't really start to get into the main point of his verse until the 6th line. There, he starts to question if his music is really hate music or if it's beautiful music that is food for the spirit. The problem with this line, as is the problem with the verse, is that he never really offers an answers to the question, thus he never adequalty argues that his music is not what it is said to be. What he does do is turn it around and throws insults back at his critics by questioning who they are to criticize him when they themselves may have done some of the same things he talks about. But the problem with that is that the reasoning is not there. It doesn't take an innocent person to be able to tell what it right or wrong.



Jay-Z's verse is a lot more effective to me and it speaks on a larger and much more important social issue than Eminem's verse does. His verse is relevant responds to a lot of the criticism that rappers have gotten over the years for speaking so raw about what goes on in the ghetto. Jay-Z's verse speaks on racial and political issues in when he says "The same ghetto you ruined" In a way that line points the finger at the goverment for the state of the ghettos. It implies the lack of adequate education and jobs in the ghettos and the CIA funding of crack in the ghettos.

"I made something doing" He states how he made it out of the ghetto despite the odds against him, despite the goverment's lack of help.

"I give you the news, with a twist, it's just his ghetto point of view, the renegade, you been afraid, I penetrate pop culture, bring 'em a lot closer to the block where they pop toasters"

These lines are powerful, particularily the line "You been afraid" Basically what he's pointing out is that the media and the goverment is often afraid to point out the ills of the ghettos due partially to being ashamed of what they did to it and their fear of facing the truth of just how bad things are. It's like they're throwing their nose in the air, afraid to live with themselves about what is occuring.

Jay-Z adequatly points himself out as a renegade by showing how he's broken through pop culture and illustrated the ills of the ghetto.


"How you relate music, that thugs with nothing relate to it, I helped them see their way through it, not you"

He brings up the hypocrisy in the media sitting back and criticising rappers for their portrayals of the ghetto yet not doing anything to help the people in the ghetto. He says you haven't done **** for these people, while it's me and rappers like me that have come out of the ghettos that are speaking directly to those facing some of the situations that we came out of.

I think that's really powerful.

The last line "Can't step in my pants, can't walk in my shoes, bet everything you're worth, you'll lose your tie and your shirt"

Is basically him saying that I bet everything that if you were in the same situations that I came from that you'd lose your tie and your shirt, which means that you'd lose that professional, white collar attitude.


Jay-Z's verse on Renegade is highly underrated.

NeXt In Line
07-15-2008, 02:55 PM
I agree that his verses on Renegade are underrated, they're some of his best. Keep in mind, Jay is the GOAT to me, but Eminem's verses were viewed as so much better because of his immaculate flow, multis and wordplay throughout that song. His rhyme patterns and **** are just ridiculous.

the traveler
07-15-2008, 02:58 PM
That's just the problem with rap listeners, in my opinion. Their view of lyricism is short sighted. It's not all about multis and wordplay. Jay-Z's first verse did not have a billion multis, but it was a lot more effective in stating it's point and it was a powerful verse. Most people missed out on that because it didn't have a million multis in it, which is pretty sad.

Eminem's verse had a lot of style and decorations, but when it comes down to it, his verse was not as effective in what it was saying.

THe TRiNiTY
07-15-2008, 03:03 PM
Honestly, Jay's deliver alone on that song, LETS Eminem surpass him on that track. Eminem just has the better rhyme pattern, the smoother delivery/flow, both are about equal in terms of complexity, but the song was about being a Renegade, and Eminem seemed more like one with the witty, but 'inappropiate' lines.

Jay has had a great career. He is an all time great. But on that track, Eminem got him.

Just my take on it. Way before Nas said that, I always thought it.

the traveler
07-15-2008, 03:10 PM
Did you read my breakdown on Eminem's verse? His first verse was filled with a lot of filler--about half of the verse was filler and the rest of it did not bring up any good points or arguments against the criticisms against him.

Both verses were about the criticisms that they get. Jay-Z spoke on his better and his verse spoke on a larger and more important social issue than Eminem's verse did.

Another problem with Eminem's verse is that he spent a lot of it questioning whether he was a renegade or not. Jay didn't question it. He showed how he's gone against the grain and brought issues that were taboo to the forefront of the media.

THe TRiNiTY
07-15-2008, 03:17 PM
Did you read my breakdown on Eminem's verse? His first verse was filled with a lot of filler--about half of the verse was filler and the rest of it did not bring up any good points or arguments against the criticisms against him.

Both verses were about the criticisms that they get. Jay-Z spoke on his better and his verse spoke on a larger and more important social issue than Eminem's verse did.

Lyrically, Eminem impressed me more.

Example:

We should all be be one race, no need to fight
If we do that, then the world would be right

Compared to...

I'm a nazi, lookin' for some blacks to stick it two
If I can't find some in a few, I'll settle for spics n' Jews

Now, clearly one would have the better moral meaning than the other, to a sane person.

LYRICALLY, the second set of lines is still better.

Regardless of that, it's not just the first verses. The whole song has to be accounted for. And Eminem is overall, better on that track.

the traveler
07-15-2008, 03:22 PM
I brought up the first verse because that's the verse that people claim Eminem totally outshines Jay-Z on. General opinion is that the second verses are pretty much equal.

Man, it's sad that you think those second lines are more lyrical. How are they? Just because you're rhyming multis? That makes no sense, man. So, you can basically say nothing but rhyme multis and use wordplay and be more lyrical than someone that doesn't use as many multis but has a verse that is more coherent and has more logical and deepness to it?

What is your definition of lyrical? I view verses and lyricism just as writing a paper. You have to be able to sell your points and back up your statements. I don't think how many big words you use in a paper or complex sentences can do that for you.

It's all about illustrating what you're trying to say best.

C.Y.
07-15-2008, 03:26 PM
yall heard of the original renegade version with royce da 5'9??
i prefer his first verse over jay-z

reedickyaluss
07-15-2008, 03:28 PM
"And Eminem killed you on your own ****," Nas said to Jay-Z on his diss song "Ether". But, did he really?

When asked by The Source magazine in an interview circa 2001 about what Nas said, Eminem himself said that he is surprised when people tell him that he killed Jay-Z on the hit song "Renegade" and that he believes that he and Jays verses were infact equal.

I'm with Eminem in that I don't understand why so many people feel so strongly that Eminem had the better verse than Jay-Z.


Renegade: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RejfpFCLti0

Ok, here's the thing. Both verses are similar in that they're directed towards critics. Eminem's verse is directed towards those people that were all up in arms about his lyrics and that wanted to censor his ****. Mostly it's parents and the media.

He opens up his verse stating that he may or not be the menace that he's claimed to be, then the next 6 lines are pretty empty. He spends the next 5 basically stating who he is by saying questions. These lines are pretty empty and don't have much to do with the main point of the verse.

He doesn't really start to get into the main point of his verse until the 6th line. There, he starts to question if his music is really hate music or if it's beautiful music that is food for the spirit. The problem with this line, as is the problem with the verse, is that he never really offers an answers to the question, thus he never adequalty argues that his music is not what it is said to be. What he does do is turn it around and throws insults back at his critics by questioning who they are to criticize him when they themselves may have done some of the same things he talks about. But the problem with that is that the reasoning is not there. It doesn't take an innocent person to be able to tell what it right or wrong.



Jay-Z's verse is a lot more effective to me and it speaks on a larger and much more important social issue than Eminem's verse does. His verse is relevant responds to a lot of the criticism that rappers have gotten over the years for speaking so raw about what goes on in the ghetto. Jay-Z's verse speaks on racial and political issues in when he says "The same ghetto you ruined" In a way that line points the finger at the goverment for the state of the ghettos. It implies the lack of adequate education and jobs in the ghettos and the CIA funding of crack in the ghettos.

"I made something doing" He states how he made it out of the ghetto despite the odds against him, despite the goverment's lack of help.

"I give you the news, with a twist, it's just his ghetto point of view, the renegade, you been afraid, I penetrate pop culture, bring 'em a lot closer to the block where they pop toasters"

These lines are powerful, particularily the line "You been afraid" Basically what he's pointing out is that the media and the goverment is often afraid to point out the ills of the ghettos due partially to being ashamed of what they did to it and their fear of facing the truth of just how bad things are. It's like they're throwing their nose in the air, afraid to live with themselves about what is occuring.

Jay-Z adequatly points himself out as a renegade by showing how he's broken through pop culture and illustrated the ills of the ghetto.


"How you relate music, that thugs with nothing relate to it, I helped them see their way through it, not you"

He brings up the hypocrisy in the media sitting back and criticising rappers for their portrayals of the ghetto yet not doing anything to help the people in the ghetto. He says you haven't done **** for these people, while it's me and rappers like me that have come out of the ghettos that are speaking directly to those facing some of the situations that we came out of.

I think that's really powerful.

The last line "Can't step in my pants, can't walk in my shoes, bet everything you're worth, you'll lose your tie and your shirt"

Is basically him saying that I bet everything that if you were in the same situations that I came from that you'd lose your tie and your shirt, which means that you'd lose that professional, white collar attitude.


Jay-Z's verse on Renegade is highly underrated.



damn dude, i SINCERELY enjoyed reading that... AWESOME break down...

i completely agree with you.... you should do more of these because im impressed as hell...

the traveler
07-15-2008, 03:30 PM
I guess I'm alone in my view of lyricism. Forget rapping, if someone is talking to me about something and they're using a lot of big words and lenghty sentences and if someone else speaks to me about that same thing, but is a lot clearer and their point and makes me think deeper about that thing that they're saying I'm going to think that they did the better job.

the traveler
07-15-2008, 03:36 PM
damn dude, i SINCERELY enjoyed reading that... AWESOME break down...

i completely agree with you.... you should do more of these because im impressed as hell...

Thanks, man. I wanted to discuss Nas' "I Gave you Power" but no one really wanted to talk about it indept